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Post by daredevil123 on Nov 4, 2018 16:33:24 GMT
Hi all, Several of my local shops have already begun putting up Christmas decorations, so I thought I would use that as an excuse to post a Christmas-themed FF adventure I wrote some time ago. Normal FF rules apply and you do not begin with any equipment. I would be extremely grateful for any feedback (positive or not). I am currently working on a Wild West adventure but am getting nowhere, so the thought that someone might care about my efforts would cheer me up greatly. Merry Christmas, I suppose?
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Post by stevendoig on Nov 13, 2018 21:57:15 GMT
I've just printed this off, so its easier to read/play, I'll let you know what I think in a couple days!
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Post by stevendoig on Nov 19, 2018 18:55:49 GMT
OK, Away to play this right now as per my 'six shotties and no more' thread.
1st try - 10/20/8
Back soon with the result!
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Post by stevendoig on Nov 19, 2018 19:26:40 GMT
OK, I met an old man, and I always prefer company in FF books, so I stuck by him. I found some seeing dust, and ran from a Wight horde. I had to kill the old man, got knocked out by a shaman and then had to face the Winter Necromancer. He had a skill of 13. I didn't seem to have any really useful items so I just had to fight him normally. Unbelievably, I managed to get his stamina down to 3 before he finished me off.
2nd try coming up!
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Post by stevendoig on Nov 19, 2018 19:51:10 GMT
2nd try - 11/15/11
I still would rather follow the old man. This time ,i end up dipping my knife in holy water, this helps me defeat the Winter Necromancer (just), however, this time I have no seeing dust, so I get arrested for killing Santa!
One more try tonight, this time, I'll have a good nosy around where I haven't already been....
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Post by stevendoig on Nov 19, 2018 20:18:28 GMT
3rd try - 10/19/12 OK, I succeeded!! I wont go into detail because I heartily recommend this nice wee adventure! I really liked the writing style, it felt suitably dark and atmospheric, the story was straightforward with a backstory and a bit of personality for the player character. I enjoyed the company you could pick up along the way, and the encounters were all memorable. I don't really want to give criticism but I may as well be honest! - I only have two! I never came across ANY ways or means to recover stamina points (I ended my playthrough with only 1 point left!) There was a riddle !!! - I am completely hopeless with riddles - I had to ask my wife! - though that's just a personal thing and not a fault of the gameplay / mechanics etc! Anyway, I really enjoyed that! - More please!!
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Post by daredevil123 on Nov 19, 2018 22:13:16 GMT
I'm so glad you liked it! I will press on with the Wild West book (provisionally titled "The Silent Shot") but it might take a while unless I have a breakthrough. I realise there aren't many opportunities to regain Stamina although there are quite a few Luck bonuses which makes the fights a bit easier. On the "true path" where you go to the sewers and meet the Torturer there are one or two Stamina bonuses but they can be a bit hard to find. If any other members of the forum are interested it would be great to get some additional feedback. Otherwise, thank you!
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Post by daredevil123 on Dec 21, 2018 17:39:30 GMT
*Bumped* as the adventure takes place on the Winter Solstice.
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Post by thealmightymudworm on Dec 24, 2019 4:15:24 GMT
Deleted
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Post by thealmightymudworm on Dec 24, 2019 4:16:16 GMT
Seasonal *bump*
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Post by Peter on Oct 21, 2020 7:57:06 GMT
Well. In my first attempt, I thought I was doing everything right but then I got eaten. I am puzzled - I don't know where I should have done something different. This will take several attempts.
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Post by Peter on Oct 29, 2020 18:37:37 GMT
Well. In my first attempt, I thought I was doing everything right but then I got eaten. I am puzzled - I don't know where I should have done something different. This will take several attempts. Apologies Daredevil, I have just re-read this comment and it seems a bit derogatory. I was trying to say that the adventure is unpredictable and challenging - not just a walk in the park. It will keep me absorbed for some time.
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Post by Peter on Nov 1, 2020 5:07:10 GMT
Very good. It took a few attempts, but I got there in the end. It was a nerve-wracking conclusion - my stamina almost failed me.
I think the story was very well written, good prose and nice to read. I especially like the modifications to some of the battles (e.g., roll one die to see how much extra damage the enemy does). They made sense in the context of the situation. This is something I have noticed in several of the home-made gamebooks I have read. The original "compare attack strengths, the highest wins" rule is a good simple idea, but it is a bit basic, so it is pleasing to see people trying to add to it in ways that fit the characteristics of the enemy, without deviating from the original fighting fantasy concept.
So I give this one a ranking of "very good". Thanks daredevil, conquering that adventure was time well spent.
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Post by daredevil123 on Nov 1, 2020 18:51:46 GMT
Thanks for the kind words Pete, glad you enjoyed it.
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Post by thealmightymudworm on Dec 24, 2022 4:34:06 GMT
I've finally got round to giving this a go, winning on my fourth playthrough (and needing my LUCK of 12 to see me over the line with just a handful of STAMINA remaining).
I'm too short of time due to Christmas stuff to comment at any length, but I'd have to agree with others that it's very good. The writing does a good job of bringing the scene to life (if that's the right expression) – it's a good sign that I can remember the locations and characters easily. The choices generally felt meaningful and 'hidden number' mechanics were handled nicely too.
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Post by daredevil123 on Dec 24, 2022 10:56:57 GMT
Thanks very much Mudworm. I can hardly believe it's been four years since I posted this adventure (and even longer since I wrote it). Looking back on it, and re-reading everyone's comments, it's clear I made the final battle too hard! I'm really glad you enjoyed it though. Thanks again, and merry Christmas!
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Post by thealmightymudworm on Jan 21, 2023 21:51:56 GMT
Random question: Have you considered using Linflas's tool thing to create a version of this with clickable links? I keep meaning to try it out on one of my own minis, but it would involve downloading and installing (I think) at least two different things, and my laptop is held together by sticky tape and willpower.
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Post by daredevil123 on Jan 22, 2023 12:25:50 GMT
That hadn't even crossed my mind, mostly because my IT skills are severely lacking! I'm also not sure if enough people are interested in playing it for it to be worthwhile but it is an interesting idea.
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